Turn your head to the left,
Turn your head to the right.
In order to learn,
You'll need to fight.
The chains that constrain you,
Are only in your mind.
When you escape,
You may be blind,
Because of the lights.
You will soon view the world,
In a different way.
You'll try 'n' show your friends,
But they won't want to play
Now you'll both live in a separate way.
I liked you beginning with the left and right thing because it reminded me of a song. Otherwise good job! I will say that you rhyme scheme is quite unique. It seems like a AB CD EF GG.
ReplyDeleteHAhah you were thinking the same thing as me :)
Deletehaha yeah i messed up at the end x]
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ReplyDeleteTurn your head to the right." For a minute there, I thought I was playing a game hehe :) Good job on the sonnet.
Woah Owen. So different! I'm diggin' this one.. For some reason I got chills reading it.. Not sure if it was just cold in here, or your awesome sonnet! Hahaha good job. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job on the sonnet Owen. I really like how you summarized the Cave by putting it in the freed prisoners point of view instead of third person. It was definitely a breath of fresh air!
ReplyDeleteYour sonnet is great! Haha when I started to read it I thought I was listening to some song or rap. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteYou have a really unique take on this owen...seems almost more lighthearted? It reflects your personality and I love it. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sam! I like how you made it from the prisoners point of view!
ReplyDeleteAmazing! The first two lines makes me laugh!!!.haha!
ReplyDeleteGreat rhyme scheme and perspective.. Good job!> <
Your sonnet is a good summary of the allegory. Good job!
ReplyDeleteGood job! the sonnet really hits the reader.
ReplyDeleteI like this! Easy to follow and understand what's happening!
ReplyDeleteThis is probably the most concise sonnet I've read (and I don't mean that in a backhanded compliment type of way). I really like how the sonnet is really whimsical throughout, then ends on a poignant note. Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteI love how your poem reads like instructions it made it very captivating to read. Could you comment to my blog as well please?
ReplyDeleteOh Osi poo....your awesome. Oh the sonnet yeah it was also great. A little work on the structure but it was good. Wuv u!! ;)!!!
ReplyDeleteNiiiiiiccccee. :) I like what ya did there, Owen. It really captivates the reader's interest. What are ya, some kind of hypnotist... with flowing hair? haha no, but, seriously, it's a really good sonnet.
ReplyDeleteI really like this Owen! The diction paints a great picture. Great Job!
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Good job, I really enjoyed reading your sonnet it was very creative!
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I know you already have 20 comments but please comment back on mine. I liked this sonnet a lot as such it was simple and to the point. Great job Owen!
ReplyDeleteIt's sounds almost play full and seems happy but then serious. Good job.
ReplyDeleteFate has descended upon the hour
ReplyDeleteSeek out that which is a vacuum of power
A place from which the new replaced the old
A place where the American stories were told
Find this place of a year past
Follow the breadcrumbs follow fast
I am telling you where this trail goes
Don't forget your glasses and your nose
Find the new philosopher-queen
In the room familiar to your year younger teen
^)!
Hello, I really enjoyed reading your post and I am looking forward to seeing more. When can you post Lit Terms 1-5, Spring Semester Plan 1, and the AP Prep Post 1: Siddhartha? I am looking forward to seeing them when you get the chance to post them.
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